As part of our writing work we have been learning to write poems. We got to choose and item to write a poem about. I chose a ship in a bottle to write about. We had to use 'sticky' interesting language to write our poem. Here is my poem.
Hospitable tin
Steady adventures
Comfortless old painted red
Ancient rustic minuscule worthy capsize
handmade float blue sea
handmade float blue sea
Delicate built white
Ship in bottle
Hi Shannon, I like that you used interesting words like minuscule instead of small or tiny. Its very interesting that you have not just described the thing but the actual adventure that you have predicted its been on. Maybe you should add in what the bottle looks like.
ReplyDeleteHi Shannon. You did a great job at writing your poem about the ship in the bottle. I also think you used some great 'sticky' words like ancient and rustic. My favourite line is, ' handmade float blue sea.' It makes me imagine this handmade boat floating out at sea. Well done.
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